It seems like I am constantly telling my students that editing and revising your work will lead to better, more complete, and more interesting stories. Well it seems that someone has finally taken that advice to heart. The following story by Eleonora went through several drafts and her hard work has really paid off!
Cindy and Lilly
By Eleonora
Chapter 1
There was a girl named Cindy that lives with her family. Cindy has always kept a secret from her family because they would be shocked! Well Cindy is very friendly to people. Also she has blond hair and is wearing a blue shirt with jeans. Lilly has the same gift as Cindy... to see ghosts! Lilly is sometimes shy and sometimes very friendly. She is wearing a yellow shirt and jeans. They are both in the same class in 5th grade. Then one morning, Cindy and Lilly went to class when they saw a lot of little ghost children. They both saw them at school. Then they screamed so loud that the class stared at them shocked for a long time. After that the teacher yelled, "WHAT IS THE MATTER WITH YOU TWO?" Then Cindy and Lilly went to their seats really fast and said, "We were freaked of how many kids we have in our class." After that, they began to study for their test in math. When school was over they went home to talk to a ghost from school!
To be continued...
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