Student Writer of the Week 4-17-12

This week I have an excellent example of a student who writes in detail.  I love how Sanjana takes the time to describe whats going on in the story without giving it all away at once.  Building suspense is obviously one of Sanjana's skills.  This spy story also has thoughtful plot developments that cause the characters to have to make decisions that will effect the course of the story.  Her characters feel like real people because of this!  I can't wait for chapter 2!

The Robots

By Sanjana

 Chapter 1

I am Agent F, Feasus, my partner is Agent C, Carmen, our back up is Agent Q, Quimberly.  Yesterday night there was some strange things going on.  People were disappearing, even the president!  So our agency team is going to find out what is making this happen and who is making this happen.  Today Agent C and I saw the person who is making all these people disappear.  We hid behind the bushes to see what he was doing. 

I called Agent Q right away, “Hello, Agent Q, we spotted the villan.  Come quickly.  It took some time for Agent Q to come and the villain was starting to leave, with something huge in his hand, I couldn’t make out it was but it had a robot face!  Agent C sugested we follow him and we did.  We were walking right behind him and he didn't even notice, which was great.  He lead us through a forest, then stopped in front of a huge, evil labratory.

He had a voice activiating machine wich would only recomend to his voice to open the door, some way or another we had to sneak in.  This time we hid by the wall.  When he went inside the doorway, we went right after him.

"Oh my Gosh!" me and Agent Q said at the same time.

"Jinks, triple jinks, you own me a soda," I said.

"Hurry up and focus on our job not on soda" Agent C said.

Back to... (oh my gosh), there were hundreds of people trapped in cages.  Small ones, big ones, even humongous ones.  I heard a noise behind me and when I looked back Agent C was gone!  I didn't know what to do I had to act fast!