Student Writing of the Week 1-17-12

Hello everyone, 

I'm excited to share the chosen writing this week!  Antoine set his story during World War II!  Watch how he plays with time using a flashback in part II. 

All students can print out or hand copy this story and hand correct it showing correct editing marks for extra credit!  Good luck!

PART I
ACE

By: Antoine

A 17 year old by named Jake leonard.  He was telling his mom (Rose) if he could join the army to fight the war.  What he expected was No! but what he got was "Do what you want but promise to be safe you hear me."  When the bus came to pick him up he gave his mom and sister one last kiss and left as he left he could see his mom crying and waving.  1 month after the war he was a ace Flying in the sky then all of a sudden he was falling to the pacific ocean all he could Remember him looking out the window of the bus and then his sister.  The soldier died with love in his heart and a smile across his Face

Or did he?

PART II
ACE: REATURN OF HITLER

"Hitler! Hitler is coming! get in your Battle posicions!" Said Genaral west.  "Jake com over Here Now!" Genaral said.  "Sir Jakes plane went down at 2:30 this morning." said corpral  Then all of the sudden something came out of the water.  It was Jake!  That morning Jake was told to make sure there were no enemy aircrafts in sight.  Two miles it was sure to be clear but all of the sudden to enemy boats showed on The radar  they started shooting at his wings  they were siDe by side so he only has 1 choice.  blow up the plane when he know it was time he jumped off the plane the parashuted off the plane.  He swam 20 miles intill he saw the base.  "Gosh man your like a lion thats not afraid of water!" said Genaral.  "Give Him food, water, and a shower!  He stink like a pig that just past gas!" Corpral said.  When Jake got all his needs he picked up a sniper and climbed a tree.  when he saw Hitler he waited till the target was clear an Fired.  The Nazi surrenderd to the soldiers.  They let the Nazi's go For peace.  Jake survives the rest of the war. 

And These are the tales of:

JAKE LEONARD